Friday, April 15, 2011

Amy Tan

       Amy Tan was ashamed of her family because, they have a different ethnic background then the minister's family. But later on Amy tan understand that she should be proud the be different then others. After she gotten over Robert Amy was able to appreciate who she was. I also felt ashamed  once or twice when I was young.  When I was just seven years old, my family and I went on little vacation to Disneyland.
      I was having a great time with my family at Disneyland. Having no care in the world. Jumping up and down from the sugar rush I get from eating to much candy. The family wanted to go on a roller coasters; I was deeply afraid of roller coasters at this age. I refused to go on the ride because i was ashamed of people knowing that I was afraid of roller coasters , but there was no one there to watch over me, so I was dragged to my uncertain death. When you go into a dark tunnel and it starts to go faster and faster then it suddenly starts to do the sharp turns while it thrash my head left to right. It starts dramatically goes up slowly. Deep sigh of relief hopping it is all over.But then it suddenly stops 200 ft above the ground. this would of been a good time to say that  I was afraid of heights as well. my heart is throbbing out of my chest. Holding for dear life, the cart slowly creeps forward like a old man. Then down to my grave I cried as the cart swooshes downwards to my death. As I knew it the ride was over. I sat there for a minute just to take in what have just happened. Then started to cry because I was really upset that my parents put trough that and also I was scared to death just a few moments ago. But my parents brought me outside and got me Ice cream and I shut up and stop crying. While enjoying my ice cream,  they said to me that I will never get over my fears, If I do not come face to face with my fears. They also called me a little girl for crying. So I manned up and started to ride roller coasters. First I started with the kiddie rides that is only 3 feet off the ground and moved my way up to the bigger and the faster rides.

4 comments:

  1. Hey Jason,
    I noticed that some of your sentences were slightly over-written and ran on a bit. Though there was a great amount of detail that gave depth to the memory, which I did enjoy very much.
    Nice essay though.

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  2. Your response's greatest strength was when you were talking about your personal experience. You used alot of detail which is really good, because it kept me interested in your story the whole time.

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  3. hey Jason, i noticed that in your essay your wrote many of your sentences with different tenses. The way you explain every move makes the reader feel as if they were there. Great job on this blog.

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  4. Nice story a lot of details. Be careful of spacing after periods and also when to use capitals.

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